Monday, September 14, 2009

Excerpt Monday!

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It's Excerpt Monday again, and I'm posting the first chapter of the f/f/m fairy tale menage I was insane enough to start writing last week. It's based on The Little Mermaid, but has a few twists. First, the merpeople are pretty much a bunch of elitist jerks. Second, the Sea Witch isn't evil, just...justifiably bitchy. Third, she wants in on the HEA.

Go ahead and read if you dare. :D

10 comments:

Aislinn Kerry said...

Ooh, this looks awesome! So cool! I love the idea of turning villains into protagonists. :)

Stephanie Draven said...

This is very different, and I like it.

Evie Byrne said...

This is going to be a fun one! Great idea, Kirsten.

Cathy in AK said...

Whoa and damn. Love the protagonist. Bad girls, or perceived bad girls, are a fave : )

Stephanie said...

Great excerpt, Kirsten! :)

Ella Drake said...

Definitely a winner. & a wonderful hook.

Debbie Mumford said...

Beautiful. I don't usually like present tense, but you're a master at pulling me in and letting me live the tale. Wow!

kirsten saell said...

Thanks, guys. :D

Hey, Debbie, I'm not usually big on first person of any kind, but whenever I write it, it seems to always want to be in present tense. It's like if I'm going for the intimacy of first person, I might as well go whole hog with the immediacy of narrating as it happens.

The story will be told in three POVs--Linnae and the prince are in third person past tense, and frankly, I think the witch's POV will end up dominating the story. She's just so...deliciously conflicted. :)

MB (Leah) said...

Wow, that was so interesting and different. Totally hooked me in.

And what Debbie said. I'm not too hot on first person present tense, but I didn't even really notice it in this story. It really worked for me here.

Love the main character, so evil and yet seems kind of damaged. Love complex characters.

Alexia Reed said...

Oh wow. This is so entirely different. I don't think I'd have ever seen the possibility you showed can be there before. You've done a really good job of making her sympathetic and creating a story I want to read and to know.